Lady Sydney

Thanks for your input, Cade! :D I've reduced it down to one "my" now. ^_^

Thank you for your comments, bubble and Audy! :D They were very helpful in letting me know how I should write the rest of my poems from here on out. ...

Why did you comment your own poem? :?

Thanks for your comments! I'll remove the commas next time, Fang, thanks for pointing that out. ^_^ And... Jack! :shock: You're... back! *hugs* Yay. Welcome back and thanks for reading ...

Lol. Well, thanks, then. That is a great compliment! ^_^ I actually got the idea, although this may sound odd, from actual rain. I absolutely love the rain, but it ...

Wow. :shock: I can't believe I actually did this right! Thank you so much to all of you who have critiqued/reviewed. Much appreciated. As said before, I may write another ...

Thank you so much, you guys! Your criticisms are much appreciated. ^_^ Joeducktape: I didn't even know that I switched tenses until you pointed it out. I've read this three ...

Thanks so much for your opinions, guys! Now that I look back, my first two lines do seem pretty cliche. :? But, anyway, it was fun coming up with that ...

Ok, I've re-written it now! Please tell me what you think of it.

Lol That's what I said to tell me at the very beginning. If everything is too crammed to seem realistic, I will be more than happy to expand what's going ...

Thanks, Andy! Will keep that in mind for the next chapter. ~Syd

Thanks. (as I've already said a million times in chat) Will work on that for future terms...even if it was an old piece. It's still good to keep that in ...

...perhaps put the flashback in italics (or if that's too cliche, in bold, or in stars, or whatever you want) to separate it from the present. Urgh. *head/desk* Ya know, ...

Mmm. ^^ Thanks, Squallz. Echoing the post I made before, thanks for your input. As for what's happened? It's implied that she just hasn't had the best of a life, ...

Thanks for the crit, meevs. ^^ It's suppose to be jumpy, actually, kinda like listening to a CD ya know? You play it, rewind it, stop, and replay it. That's ...